tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373573052582581717.post8697503926859066033..comments2023-06-06T06:49:04.399-07:00Comments on Cinder Bridge: Themes and schemescinderkeyshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01578961959712679966noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373573052582581717.post-31711693238255757532009-02-02T00:48:00.000-07:002009-02-02T00:48:00.000-07:00Changed. Except now I think I need a different ter...Changed. Except now I think I need a different term than "status quo" in the second sentence. Eh. I'll think about it later. :)cinderkeyshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01578961959712679966noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373573052582581717.post-21474057402644312132009-02-01T09:24:00.000-07:002009-02-01T09:24:00.000-07:00I don't think anything needs to go in its place! ...I don't think anything needs to go in its place! Your metaphor is evident soon enough, and keeping the first sentence short sets a snappier mood for the whole passage.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373573052582581717.post-14997270011256756952009-02-01T00:18:00.000-07:002009-02-01T00:18:00.000-07:00Thanks. :) I'm not married to the "comfortable r...Thanks. :) I'm not married to the "comfortable routine" bit. I'm open to suggestions as to what might go in its place.cinderkeyshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01578961959712679966noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8373573052582581717.post-66051439133505039892009-01-31T13:04:00.000-07:002009-01-31T13:04:00.000-07:00I would strike "disturbing your comfortable routin...I would strike "disturbing your comfortable routine" from the first line. Aside from that, I dig it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com